Honest Opinions Needed!

What do you think of my cast so far (please be honest but respectful)

  • Alioth [name_f]Jane[/name_f] Hannon [name_m]Al[/name_m]’ ee ith (POV, 13 yrs.) medium-long red-brown hair, pale skin, light blue eyes, she’s a bit nerdy and awkward, loves reading and alone time but also loves people and has strong morals

  • [name_u]Rigel[/name_u] [name_u]Mason[/name_u] Hannon (POV’s brother, 14 yrs.) messy red-brown hair, medium skin, dark blue eyes, he’s a “cool kid” skateboarder but would choose his family over his popularity (though he would never admit it) nickname Foot but only Alioth calls him that ([name_u]Rigel[/name_u] means foot)

  • Elisabelle [name_u]Carson[/name_u] (POV’s best friend, 13 yrs.) long black hair, dark skin, brown eyes, she’s sassy, fiery, but cares a lot and is a musical genius, nickname [name_f]Belle[/name_f]

  • Corter _____ ([name_u]Rigel[/name_u]’s best friend, 14 yrs.) tan skin, blonde hair, bright green eyes, he’s rich, arrogant, and forgetful but tends to accidentally be a big help

  • [name_u]Brennan[/name_u] [name_u]Gray[/name_u] (identical twin to [name_u]Elliott[/name_u], 13 yrs.) brown hair, medium skin, brown eyes, he’s very intelligent and kind, and will fight for what’s right alongside his brother

  • [name_u]Elliott[/name_u] [name_u]Gray[/name_u] (identical twin to [name_u]Brennan[/name_u], 13 yrs.) brown hair, medium skin, brown eyes, he’s very intelligent and kind, and will fight for what’s right alongside his brother

  • [name_f]Melody[/name_f] _____ (met halfway in story and joins for rest, 14 yrs.) short brown hair, tan skin, gray-blue eyes, she’s energetic and sweet and helps the group tremendously

  • [name_m]Joseph[/name_m] Hannon ([name_u]Rigel[/name_u] & Alioth’s dad, [name_f]Audrey[/name_f]’s husband, early 40’s) messy red-brown hair, medium skin, light blue eyes, he’s an astronomer (hence the star names for kids), loves to read, and tends to not talk much

  • [name_f]Audrey[/name_f] Hannon ([name_u]Rigel[/name_u] & Alioth’s mom, [name_m]Joseph[/name_m]’s wife, early 40’s) medium brown hair, pale skin, dark blue eyes, she’s kind but will talk your ear off, she works part-time at a pet store

Thanks for any responses!

I think these are some great names, but maybe it would help if we knew where/when the story is set? At first I thought Alioth was a really strange name, pretty, but unusual, but when you explained that it was a star because the dad is an astronmer, it makes a lot of sense! I think overall the names are really distinctive and thought out, and they sound good together.

All of these names are great and they really do stand out!

Thank you! Here’s a basic idea of the plot:

It’s set in the present around Kansas City, Missouri. Basically, the group goes on a road trip with Mr. and Mrs. Hannon but Rigel gets kidnapped. The villain requests certain things from the group in order to get Rigel back. I haven’t worked out exactly what they are yet, but each is from a different fairy tale. For example, the villain may request Cinderella’s slipper and Aladdin’s genie lamp and Snow White’s apple. Like I said, I’m not sure what the items are yet but that’s the basic idea.

I think the names work really well together! They’re all at least somewhat uncommon but not to the point where they sound weird or unrealistic. I really like the name Alioth.

Not sure if you need it but I thought I’d offer, I am from Kansas and I know KC pretty well so if you want any help with places or things in and around there, I’d be happy to help! I’m more familiar with KCK but venture into KCMo often, and I could give information just about the city in general (ie. the sports teams, schools, etc.) If you want it, feel free to PM me whenever! If not, that’s cool too, just thought I’d ask.

Actually I’m from the KC area myself. I figured for my first real book I’d set it in a familiar place. But thanks for offering :slight_smile:

Awesome :slight_smile: Thought I’d offer!