Thoughts on the plot and characters

Conflict: [name]Vera[/name] Tandova has to side with the enemy to save her brother, [name]Dimitri[/name], from the Crimean War

Rising action

  1. [name]Vera[/name] receives word of the death of two of her brothers, [name]Ivan[/name] and [name]Alexander[/name] runs away from St. Petersburg to the front lines to try and find the third brother, [name]Dimitri[/name], and bring him home
  2. [name]Vera[/name] stumbles across a camp of young British deserters [name]Conall[/name], who was a footman for a wealthy family in [name]London[/name], [name]Malcolm[/name], A firey Scottish farm boy, [name]Rhys[/name], a slightly snobbish wealthy [name]London[/name] boy and [name]Bianca[/name], a young nurse who ran from the field when her brother died under her watch.
  3. [name]Bianca[/name] convinces the boys to go back to the front lines to find [name]Dmitri[/name] with [name]Vera[/name]

Climax: They find [name]Dimitri[/name] at the Battle of Malakoff

Falling Action

  1. [name]Vera[/name] & [name]Bianca[/name] run out on to field dressed as British nurses to find [name]Dimitri[/name] and find him wounded and are confronted by Russian soldiers for trying to move him. They start shooting at the girls and [name]Conall[/name], [name]Malcolm[/name] & [name]Rhys[/name] protect them long enough to get [name]Dimitri[/name] to hospital.
  2. The try to take them to [name]Bianca[/name]’s old field hospital, run by [name]Florence[/name] Nightingale, but are refused because [name]Dimitri[/name]’s Russian uniform. They wander the field looking for another hospital to take [name]Dimitri[/name] and now the three boys as well. They find it in a Jamaican nurse named [name]Mary[/name]. She save [name]Dimitri[/name], [name]Conall[/name] & [name]Rhys[/name], but loses [name]Malcolm[/name].
  3. They all realize that as soon as the boys recover they’ll be put on the front lines again and start searching for a way to get back to either [name]London[/name] or St. Petersburg. They find their escape in Dr. [name]Watson[/name] a military doctor who was seriously injured in the battle and is being sent back to [name]London[/name], he agrees to sneak them out and back to [name]London[/name].

Resolution: At first they all stay with [name]Watson[/name], but as soon as the war’s over [name]Rhys[/name] goes home and [name]Watson[/name] gets [name]Bianca[/name] at the [name]Fitzroy[/name], a hospital and medical school. [name]Conall[/name] was fired from his position as a footman for deserting. Feeling they’ve overstayed their welcome [name]Vera[/name] and [name]Dimitri[/name] go back to St. Petersburg. At [name]Watson[/name]’s urging [name]Conall[/name] follows them and confesses his love for [name]Vera[/name].

Setting:
St. Petersburg
[name]Forrest[/name] near the frontlines
[name]Mary[/name] Seacole’s hospital
[name]London[/name]

Situation/climate:
War between two former allies

Characters:
[name]Vera[/name] Nikolaevna Tandova - [name]Brunette[/name], [name]Green[/name] eyes - 16
[name]Conall[/name] [name]Edward[/name] [name]Madigan[/name] – Dark brown hair, blue eyes-17
[name]Bianca[/name] [name]Alice[/name] [name]Warren[/name] – Blonde, grey eyes-17
[name]Malcolm[/name] [name]Donald[/name] [name]McLeod[/name] – [name]Ginger[/name], brown eyes-18 “[name]Mac[/name]”
[name]Rhys[/name] [name]William[/name] [name]Alexander[/name] [name]Johnson[/name] - [name]Brunette[/name], brown eyes-18 “Monkey”
[name]Dmitri[/name] Nikolaevich Tandov - [name]Brunette[/name], brown eyes – 18 “[name]Dima[/name]”
[name]John[/name] [name]Hamish[/name] [name]Watson[/name] – Blonde, blue eyes – 29 “[name]Doctor[/name]”

Thoughts on the plot and characters and their names?

This sounds great. You have everything outlined well. I don’t see any problem with the names of the characters. They fit well and all sound unique. Good job.

This is really interesting. I would want to read it! I think you’ve got a lot of the details or Russian naming cultures down (It was confusing for me at first, but now I’ve got it.) and the English characters don’t have dull names that I see ([name]Mary[/name], [name]Elizabeth[/name], [name]Betsy[/name], ect.) they have a unique flavor too them. The plot is good too, I like that it appeals to ones emotions, but doesn’t get soap-operay. I’d love to know if [name]Vera[/name] and [name]Conall[/name] end up together!

  • [name]Athena[/name]

[name]Do[/name] you know about Wattpad?? Your could publish it on there!! I WANT TO [name]READ[/name] IT!!

~[name]Jasmine[/name]

I don’t think I’ve done enough writing to publish it anywhere yet, I’m still researching and I’ve just started writing, but I probably will when it’s ready.