Names with meaning for story-might need to change

I’m writing a story for a writing contest. Need to explain story and character names; you let me know if I need to change any + suggestions.

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cw: child abuse, suicide

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[name_f]Story[/name_f] is about a girl with an abusive mom. [name_f]She[/name_f] had an older sister who committed suicide before she was born. [name_m]The[/name_m] twist is that the main character is the reincarnation of her sister, and she remembers everything from her past life because she was unable to drink from the river [name_f]Lethe[/name_f] before she reincarnated (story takes place in a world where Greek mythology is real, except with reincarnation. Also story is set in contemporary America.).

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Names of characters (in-story and mentioned):

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[name_f]Erin[/name_f]: Main character. [name_m]Her[/name_m] name is supposed to call to mind Erinyes, the Greek goddess of the underworld who take vengeance for the dead. This name is more realistic for a real life human being. [name_m]The[/name_m] problem is that it was my almost-name, so it might raise some eyebrows if my family ever reads this story (my real life was never this bad).

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[name_f]Mackayla[/name_f]: [name_m]The[/name_m] older sister. Used this name because I think it has the same vibes as [name_f]Mackenzie[/name_f] and I got some details for this story from the [name_f]Mackenzie[/name_f] Fierceton case that was making rounds a few years ago.

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[name_f]Sharon[/name_f]: [name_m]The[/name_m] mom’s name. I used this as a more ‘human’ form of [name_m]Charon[/name_m], who ferries souls to the underworld in Greek mythology. I very much do not want to change this character name!

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[name_f]Lisa[/name_f]: One of Mackayla’s elementary school teachers, who was mean to her. Also friends with the mom. I used this as a more ‘human’ form of [name_f]Lyssa[/name_f], the Greek goddess of madness.

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[name_f]Melina[/name_f]: Erin’s elementary school teacher, who acts all sweet but refuses to believe her when she tells her about the abuse. I used this because it comes from the Greek word for honey, but is also similar to [name_f]Melinoe[/name_f], a goddess from the underworld who is a harbinger of nightmares and madness (fitting because the idea for this story came to me in a nightmare). [name_m]The[/name_m] problem is that it’s my real-life middle name, and I often use my middle name in addition to my first and last name in my publications to distinguish myself.

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[name_f]Helena[/name_f]: Erin’s aunt, whom she runs away to try and live with. She’s a mystic, so [name_f]Erin[/name_f] thinks she might understand that she’s a reincarnation. I figured it’s like [name_f]Helena[/name_f] Blavatsky and [name_f]Helen[/name_f] of [name_m]Troy[/name_m]

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Please give feedback; thanks!

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I think they all make great sense, and honestly, the similarities to yourself wouldn’t be that big of a deal to me. [name_m]You[/name_m] could put the little disclaimer that people often do, saying that any resemblance to real people is purely coincidental to try to distance your reality from the story.

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[name_m]The[/name_m] only suggestion I’d have is instead of [name_f]Melina[/name_f], maybe [name_f]Meliora[/name_f]? It’s always reminded me of [name_f]Melina[/name_f] and [name_f]Melinoe[/name_f], plus, I love it, but it may be a bit more unusual than what you’re going for, I’m not really sure.

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Overall, I think a quick chat with your family, explaining the reasoning, or a little disclaimer at the beginning could probably handle that little concern. Good luck.

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[name_m]The[/name_m] problem, as I see it, as the names you’ve chosen to represent Greek goddesses/gods have more obvious symbolic meanings that most readers will assume first, if they assume anything at all.

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[name_f]Erin[/name_f] is almost associated with [name_f]Ireland[/name_f]. [name_f][/name_f] [name_m]The[/name_m] name is not an easy cognate for the name you want.

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[name_f]Mackayla[/name_f] is a rather dated, “unique” spelling of [name_f]Michaela[/name_f]. [name_f][/name_f] [name_f]Michaela[/name_f] was the abandoned fiancee in [name_f]Carmen[/name_f] and [name_m]Michael[/name_m] is an archangel.

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I get Sharon/Charon but Karon/Charon might be a better cognate. [name_f][/name_f] [name_f]Sharon[/name_f] is a place name in the Bible.

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[name_f]Love[/name_f] [name_f]Melina[/name_f] and I’d use [name_f]Lyssa[/name_f] rather than [name_f]Lisa[/name_f].

I like these names for a story set in contemporary [name_m]America[/name_m]. I think you’ve hit a good balance where the names are familiar and realistic for the time period and the age groups, without all being top 10 names or otherwise overdone. I also like that the mythological connections are subtle since it seems like you’re going for more “normal” American names rather than obvious mythical choices.

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[name_f]My[/name_f] only wonder is if in a version of modern [name_m]America[/name_m] where Greek Mythology was real and universally accepted (rather than something like [name_m]Percy[/name_m] [name_m]Jackson[/name_m] where most people don’t believe in it), if naming choices might be different overall as people might be more likely to actually name their children after mythological figures in an honorary/religious capacity? But that’s more a world building thing. I think your current names make perfect sense for a realistic modern-day US scenario.

Returned to the story, went with @AcutePunubiris[name_f][/name_f] suggestion and renamed [name_f]Melina[/name_f] [name_f]Meliora[/name_f].

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I also renamed [name_f]Erin[/name_f] [name_f]Vanessa[/name_f] since [name_f]Vanessa[/name_f] kind of sounds like vendetta or vengeance, even though they have unrelated etymologies.

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