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Okay, here’s an excerpt from “Appinway”. I’ll give more tomorrow.

Christie was getting tired. She had been up extra late the night before. [name_m]Matt[/name_m] had been in his room playing video games, when [name_u]Christie[/name_u], wearing her favorite striped pajamas, had come in crying.

“What’s wrong, Trissy?” [name_m]Matt[/name_m] clicked a button on the video game and a plain gray screen popped up with a button saying “PAUSED”.

Christie sniffled and wiped her nose on her striped sleeve. “I had a bad dream,” she whimpered.

“Oh.” [name_m]Matt[/name_m] clicked the button again and the game started up. [name_u]Christie[/name_u] silently walked over and sat on the bed next to him. Had it been one of her parents, she would have been told to go back to bed, but [name_m]Matt[/name_m] didn’t say anything. [name_u]Christie[/name_u] wiped her eyes with her other sleeve.

“[name_m]Matt[/name_m], what are you playing?” [name_u]Christie[/name_u] scooted closer to him and looked up at the screen, where some sort of creature seemed to be running around.

“It’s called Vaarl Union,” [name_m]Matt[/name_m] told her.

“[name_m]Can[/name_m] I play?” [name_u]Christie[/name_u] asked.

Matt hesitated. “I’m not sure if you’d like it, Trissy.” He looked at her. “It’s pretty scary. I don’t want you to have another nightmare.”

“I’m not scared!” [name_u]Christie[/name_u] blinked away the tears and put her hands on her hips, trying to make a tough face. “I’m brave, see?”

“You look more constipated than brave,” he joked. [name_u]Christie[/name_u] started giggling and reached for the controller. [name_m]Matt[/name_m] took it out of her reach.

“No, this isn’t very appropriate. Wait- do you want to make an alien?” [name_m]Matt[/name_m] asked.

“Yeah!”

Matt had pushed a few buttons, then handed [name_u]Christie[/name_u] the controller. “You have to move the stick that way to choose the eyes,” he had directed.

Thoughts?

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I never got back to you! I usually only work on one project at a time, so to answer your question, yes.

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Thank you :blush:

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I saw that you’ve gotten some great comments on your own thread! So I’ll just say that I really like the sibling dynamic that [name_u]Christie[/name_u] and [name_m]Matt[/name_m] have here. He’s a good brother! I like this start :grin:

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I talked about this before when the story was pretty different, but now that I’ve actually finalized the format and details and started writing it…

Title: Hiraeth

Demographics: Probably young adult? Maybe adult?

Genre: Paranormal, folklore, supernatural, low fantasy, magical realism

Medium/Format: novel (maybe novella)

Characters: [name_f]Niamh[/name_f], [name_f]Bronagh[/name_f], [name_f]Mairead[/name_f], [name_u]Darragh[/name_u], [name_m]Lundy[/name_m], [name_m]Wulfric[/name_m]

Blurb: Some call us psychopomps. The job listing calls us paranormal pest control.

Niamh [name_u]Connolly[/name_u] never expected to find herself in this line of work–one where death is a constant companion, and ghosts are just the tip of the paranormal iceburg. After tragedy strikes, however, she finds herself packing up everything she’s ever owned and moving across the country to join [name_u]Penumbra[/name_u], a group of supernatural specialists who are as much a family as they are coworkers. Managing the undead, [name_f]Niamh[/name_f] discovers, sure makes you feel alive.

I haven’t shared my writing online in a super long time so I’m nervous too but maybe I will if there’s enough interest :no_mouth:

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Not sure if this is allowed, but I made a page about my characters if anybody’s still interested in them. Yes, I know that Facebook isn’t that popular anymore.

If you see my real name, just ignore it. I still wanna be [name_f]Theodora[/name_f].
:stuck_out_tongue_closed_eyes:

Oh, and I’ve been thinking of reviving my romance novel. I've made some big changes and at some point, it almost becomes a medical drama. I swear, my stories have minds of their own.

@Ellory @Wandarine

Your stories sound so fun! I’d love to read them!

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Ahhh, ohmigosh, I’m so sorry I didn’t respond sooner!! :sob: :scream:

@AerieEerie This really sounds like an interesting premise! I know you’ve talked about it before, but it’s exciting that you’re in the writing stage now. I love all those genres, so I’m sure I’d like this. And, of course, I love those names! The blurb is a hook. It’s relatable in ways until it’s not :laughing: What kind of tragedy did [name_f]Niamh[/name_f] face? Does it have to do with name of the story?
I totally understand if you don’t want to put your writing online, but if you ever feel up to it, I would love to read more about this!

@Theodora_Phoenix Heeyyyyyyy that’s so cool!! I don’t personally have a facebook, but I’m definitely going to check this out! [name_m]Don[/name_m]’t worry, you’ll always be [name_f]Theodora[/name_f] :wink:
I’m glad you’re also thinking of your other story again, and that it’s going places even you didn’t expect! Hopefully you’re having fun with it, but it sounds fun!

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Thanks! I’m trying to branch out more on social media, but I really only have Facebook. Well, I have Reddit, but that’s not good for original content and then my family would find out my username.

I also put some experimental video clips on YouTube. They’re very rough (lots of audio glitches and some parts are basically just a storyboard) and possibly not even canon, but I’m hoping that it will help introduce my characters to the world. :slightly_smiling_face:

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Thank you so much! I didn’t include it in the blurb for fear it was too dark, but [name_f]Niamh[/name_f]’s best friend drowns and becomes a ghost.. Hiraeth might be a place holder, but it refers to homesickness for a place you can’t return to, which fits [name_f]Niamh[/name_f] moreso in wishing for a time rather than a physical place.

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Been looking through my Google Drive, and found a…quality piece of writing, of which I am now sharing. Enjoy?

(PS, feel free to ridicule it. I know it sucks.)
(PPS, I have not changed the formatting, spelling, etc. It is exactly as I found it.)

The...story

A soft breeze ruffled my red and white chicken feathers. The stale smell of hay flooded my hard, orange nose. [name_f]My[/name_f] neon green tutu was scratching my waist. [name_f]Carli[/name_f] (a calico cat) was rubbing her brown, black, and white splotched fur against the “rustic” (I guess?) edge of my nesting box, where a warm, brown egg was nested in a generous pile of hay. ”Moo,” cried [name_f]Calli[/name_f], an orphaned black angus calf that I had taken under my wing (get it?!). Her silky black hair glistened in the hot sun.

The barn I was standing in felt like a jail cell, locked in because [name_m]Farmer[/name_m] hadn’t come in a LONG time. “I’m so hungry!”, whined [name_f]Calli[/name_f]. “Shut your mouth you dumb calf,” snapped [name_f]Carli[/name_f]. I sighed. “[name_f]Carli[/name_f]! That was NOT nice. [name_m]Say[/name_m] sorry to [name_f]Callie[/name_f]. NOW." The jet black calf’s huge blue eyes stared down into mine. “Fine. I’m sorry [name_f]Callie[/name_f]. And I guess I am like, a little hungry. Okay, maybe like a lot hungry.”, purred [name_f]Carli[/name_f].

Finally she agrees, I thought. “Well then, I’m calling a confidential meeting.”, I announced. We all huddled up together. Surprisingly, it wasn’t to “babyish” for [name_f]Carli[/name_f]. “So, to get to the food, we need to break out of here and get into the feed room, somehow.” [name_f]Carli[/name_f] rolled her yellow eyes. “Who made you the boss?” I shot her the side eye. “I was just sayin’, like, how are we like, gonna do like, that?” I shrugged (can chickens shrug?). “Well, why don’t we start at the door.” I suggested. A few seconds later, we were promenading towards the barn gate.

Carli slid under the rusty metal bars, while [name_f]Calli[/name_f] slipped in a narrow opening between the gate and the barn wall, and I flew up to the slender wooden window built into the gate. The other two had already made it through, right as my tutu caught in a crack. I felt like a bee in molasses. “Help me!”, I bursted out urgently. [name_f]Carli[/name_f] flicked her tail. “C’mon [name_f]Calli[/name_f], let’s go. [name_f]Princess[/name_f] [name_f]Henrietta[/name_f] thinks she’s like, so good, she can like, save herself.” Poor [name_f]Calli[/name_f] looked torn between us. [name_f]Calli[/name_f] stamped her foot. “No, [name_f]Carli[/name_f]. I’m helping [name_f]Princess[/name_f] [name_f]Henrietta[/name_f] whether you want me to or not. You’re wrong. You are the the one who thinks you’re the best. I wanted to dance with joy. [name_f]Calli[/name_f] found her voice!

Carli stalked off while [name_f]Calli[/name_f] toddled towards me. Soon enough, [name_f]Calli[/name_f]’s curly back was directly underneath me. I eased my speckled torso out of the tutu, and my feathered self fluttered onto the calf’s sturdy back. I hopped off and landed on the dusty ground. I surveyed my surroundings. The calico cat was nowhere to be seen. Oh well!, I thought. “Umm, I’m hungry,” [name_f]Calli[/name_f] whined, just as her stomach rumbled. We dashed over to the feed room. [name_f]Calli[/name_f] slammed her body into the door. I could hear the wood splinter, but I didn’t worry about it. The smell of food was like a warm blanket on a cold night.

We dove into the feed buckets and ate till’ there was no room left in any of [name_f]Calli[/name_f]’s four stomachs. “Lamow, Laree’s reyal mwesslin wown.” [name_f]Calli[/name_f] stated, with range cubes clogging her mouth. “What”, I took a peck of food. “[name_f]Do[/name_f]”, peck. “You mean.” peck, peck, peck (I didn’t know I liked Purina Chicken Complete Adult Recipe so much). “Ya’ know,” [name_f]Calli[/name_f] said now with no cow feed in her mouth. “[name_f]Carli[/name_f]’s really missing out. How did you not know I said that?” We both burst out laughing. [name_f]Calli[/name_f] gave me a rough lick on my small neck. “BFFs forever!”, The calf yelled at the top of her lungs.

Guess what? I don’t miss that snobbish cat one bit. I guess I like, kinda’ miss her. Okay, maybe like, a lot.

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Haha, I love the first sentence. I was expecting something like “red and white curly hair that fell down my back like waves of the ocean” :grin:

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This, Ellory. This is art.

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Title: I don’t have one yet :slight_smile:

Age Group: I’d say maybe 9+

Genre: Historical Fiction/Modern Fiction

Medium: Hopefully a series! Idk how many books though

Characters: There are two main characters. One lives in 1908, and the other in present day. The one in 1908’s name is Della-Mae Sarika Karlsen. She is 12 years old and has long white blond hair, and light blue eyes. Her family immigrated from Denmark to the USA a few years before she was born. She had a sister who died six years before the story starts, and her father died three years before it started. She has eight siblings (not including the dead one), and I’ll list them here.
Jude 17
Ida 15
Floyd 13
Della Mae 12 (mc)
Fern (would be 11)
Jebediah, Josephine, and Joshua 8
Mabel 6
Reuben 3
The other main character lives in the present day (non-covid). Her name is Ivy Sofia Karlsen-Price, is 12 years old, and has the same features as Della Mae. I haven’t developed much of her yet, but the story’s going to have kind of a Scarlet Thread vibe, so Ivy learns about Della Mae throughout her story. Here are her siblings.
Nora 13
Ivy 12 (mc)
Thomas 10
Kylie 7
Logan 4
New Baby

Blurb: Ivy is a twelve year old girl growing up in the sleepy town of Momence, Illinois, USA. Her life was pretty boring until her mom had a baby, and surprising everyone by not naming it the name they had called her for the months before she was born. Her name was supposed to be Lyla Adelaide, but now her parents are saying her name is Della Fern. When Ivy asks her mom why she changed the baby’s name, she gives Ivy an old family heirloom, passed down through many generations. It’s the diary of her great great grandmother Della-Mae Karlsen, who is exactly 100 years older than Ivy, lived in the same town as Ivy, and was the same age as Ivy when she wrote the diary. (hopefully that was good!)

Excerpt:

Saturday, September 19, 1908
Momence, Illinois

Dear Marion,
I think that Jude is sweet on Vera Kelly! I have seen the way he looks at her, and I can tell he likes her. And I think that she likes him back! I would not be surprised if they end up together. In fact, I am actually cheering them on because if they do end up marrying, that will mean that Esther and I will be sisters-in-law! Reuben has just woken up. I will go comfort him, so Mor and Ida can sit.

Sunday, September 20, 1908
Momence, Illinois

Dear Marion,
I really dislike the Ryberg boys. I will not say that I hate them, because Mor says that you should never hate anybody. But I am very close to hating them, though I will never say it out loud. Today at church during potluck, Lester, Allen, Leo, and Emil, stole my, Esther, Gloria, and Dorothea’s hair ribbons and ran around the yard with them. The worst part was that we could not do anything about it, and they knew it. Floyd, Willie and Clyde Kelly, and Mark Kristiansen eventually got them back for us.

Extras: I don’t really know what to put here, so I’ll name the main characters’s friends.
Ivy: Londyn Stewart, Kinsley Hernandez, and Reese Colemann
Della Mae: Esther Kelly and Gloria Kristiansen
Oh, and another thing I have names for all the children in the families in Della Mae’s story. (And just a warning the families are pretty big so…)
Kelly: Vera 17, Harold 16, Sam 15, Willie 13, Esther 12, Clyde 10, Chester 8, Glenn 7, Addie 6, Iva 4, Felix 3, Cathie 1
Ryberg: Bernard 15, Lester 13, Allen 12, Leo 10, Emil 9, Mary 7, Amos 6, Sallie 4
Kristiansen: Charley 18 (married to Aimie), Anna 16, Mark 13, Gloria 12, Dorothea 10, Lewis 8, Jennie 5, Inez 2

Questions: I’m not very deep into the story yet, so does anyone have something cool that could happen? Any suggestions would be appreciated!

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I know I’ve posted two times in a row, but I have a new story that I’d like to share

Title: Orphans in the Woods

Age Group: 11+

Genre: Fiction/Fantasy History

Medium: Four-ish books maybe?

Characters: There’s a lot, so hang on! (btw, they’re all virtue names)
MC Patience (Pat) Eleanor Stewart 13
Reason (Reese) Isaiah Stewart 15
Liberty (Libby) Martha Stewart 10
Blessing (Bless) Eliza Stewart 6
Welcome (Welly) Mary Smith 2
Fortitude (Fort) Thomas Brown 10
Illumination (Illy) Ruth Brown 8
Able (Abe) Joshua Brown 5
Clarity (Clary) Rose Brown 3
Remember (Mem) Sarah Powell 14
Secret (Sec) Abigail Powell 11
Experience (Pierce) Samuel Clark 15
Forever (Evie) Miriam Clark 13
Promise (Missy) Delilah Clark 9

Blurb: Don’t have one that makes sense yet, so I’ll kind of just put raw thoughts here :slight_smile:
It’s about 14 kids who live in a kind of ignorant town that has a law that says “If any child loses their parents before the age of sixteen, they shall be cast out into the woods to fend for themselves; and if they should ever come back before the age of sixteen, they shall be thrown into the sea”. So obviously they all lost their parents, and all get cast out into the woods, hence the title. So the whole story is about they beat the odds together, and survive in the woods, and eventually (through the four-ish books) they build a secret town in the woods, that takes in all the orphans that have been cast out. The End. XD

Excerpt: (This is from the very beginning)

“No, Mother! Don’t go!” I beg with tears streaming down my face. “You can’t leave us. Not like this!” I look over my shoulder at Reese, who is curled up by Pap’s pallet, silently crying.
I feel Mother’s hand grab on to my wrist, and quickly snap my head back. “Pat,” she says.
“Yes?” I reply.
“Take care of Blessing for me, will you?”
“No! No! No! You can’t go!” I cry even harder.
“You can’t go like this. We need you, Mother,” Libby says softly. “Fight it. Please, Mother. Think of little Bless. She’ll be asking where you are. Think of Reason. I know you can’t see him, but he’s completely torn up over Pap. Think of Patience. She doesn’t need another thing to be rash and emotional about.
I shoot Libby a look, but she ignores me.
“And think of me, Liberty. You still have so much left to teach me. And as you always say, this town can’t bear any more Grace Wilsons,” she says almost underneath her breath. “Please, Mother. You need to stay with us. We can’t become orphans. You know what they do to orphans!”
“They cast them out into the woods, we know Libby!” Reese cries out. “I don’t need any more reminders!”
Mother looks over at Pap’s pallet where Reese is. “Come here, Reason,” she says.
“Why. What?” he says sadly, but with a hint of hope in his voice.
Mother looks straight into his eyes and says, “Don’t let them make you and your siblings go into the woods.”
And with that, she closes her eyes and exhales slowly. There’s suddenly a loud ringing in my ears, and through the tears in my own eyes, I can see Reese start sobbing again, and tears roll down Libby’s cheeks. “No, no, no. This can’t be happening,” I whisper, and run out of the sick tent.

Thanks for reading! Tell me your thoughts in the comments, or if you think that it could go anywhere :grin:

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I really want to read your books! The concept is fantastic. :grinning_face_with_smiling_eyes:

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I somehow completely missed your first post, no idea what happened, I am so sorry :anguished: But, I really like both of these!

For the first one, I think the contrast between the two different times is so intriguing, and would love to read about that. Getting to know [name_f]Della[/name_f]-[name_f]Mae[/name_f] from her diary through [name_f]Ivy[/name_f]’s eyes is so sweet and wholesome, especially as a direct descendent from her! I like the excerpts, too, it shows the day-to-day of [name_f]Della[/name_f]’s life while also giving a lot of her personality. ([name_f]My[/name_f] grandmother and her mom came to the US from Denmark when she was sixteen, so I’m even more interested in this story because of that :blush:)

As for Orphans in the [name_m]Woods[/name_m], I really like that premise! I know it’s dark, but the idea of children having to live and survive in the woods is something that a lot of kids play pretend with, and this really feels exciting and nostalgic at the same time. Not to mention, very emotional, especially with the parents dying. But the ending…just yes! [name_m]Even[/name_m] if it was a children’s book, this is definitely something that I would like to read (and maybe to my nephew when he’s old enough)! I also have to tell you, I love the names! [name_f]Virtue[/name_f] names are a weakness of mine, and I love all of them and their nicknames :heart_eyes:

Thank you for sharing these! [name_m]Feel[/name_m] free to keep us updated on them, yeah? I’d love to hear more :grin:

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[name_m]Hi[/name_m]! I’m new here do sharing what I’m writing about might be a good start.

Title: I am deciding between Unclosed Past and Missing Piece

Demographics/Ratings: Teens and [name_m]Young[/name_m] Adults probably

Genre: [name_f]Mystery[/name_f], creepy

Medium/Format: It looks like one book without a sequel right now, hope it will get published.

Characters:
[name_f]Alessandra[/name_f] ,Alessa" St. [name_m]Armand[/name_m] - 27. [name_m]Long[/name_m] red hair, blue eyes, short build. [name_m]Young[/name_m] single mother, bestselling author. Her older sister went missing when she was 15 and that deeply affected her. She choked her sister in a fit of rage, was so traumatized from it that she shut it out and made a new different memory about that fateful night.

[name_f]Leonore[/name_f] ,Lili" St. [name_m]Armand[/name_m] - 11. [name_m]Long[/name_m] curly black hair, blue eyes, tall. Alessa’s daughter named after her aunt. She is a student, loves dancing. Has frequent night terrors that ends in asthma attacks, later on tries to harm her mother in her sleep, doesn’t remember after waking up. Determinated to find what happened to her aunt when they move to her mother’s hometown. Unknowingly her aunt’s reincarnation.

Other characters: Leonore’s father will appear, Alessa’s mother, Alessa’s sister [name_f]Leonore[/name_f] will be mentioned multiple times

Blurb: When she was 15, [name_f]Alessa[/name_f] lost her older sister overnight. She went missing. Now 12 years later she returns to her hometown along with her daughter who is determinated to solve the case. But there are new informations resurfacing, more important than anyone thought.

Extras: Actually started as a 2 part story divided to before and after Lili’s death who was not Leonore’s reincarnation but chronically ill young girl who just moved with her mother to her hometown and was determinated to solve her aunt’s disappearance. She would have a diary where she wrote notes about her ,investigation" her mother found after her death and with its help actually found out what happened to her sister.

Questions: Would you read it? If not, why? [name_f]Do[/name_f] you like the ending being that [name_f]Alessa[/name_f] actually killed her sister?

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Hey, so I have a few stories on the go, so I might end up making a second or thrid one of these because it’s so much fun!

Title: I’m deciding between ’ [name_f]My[/name_f] Purpose’ or Finally Home’. I’ll probably think of better names later.

Demographics/Ratings: I guess young adults, but if it was a movie probably 13+, but I think only adults or older teens would really be interested in the story line.

Genre: [name_u]Drama[/name_u], I suppose you could call it coming of age, but that would give the wrong idea.

Medium/Format: Book, or a Movie ( I highly doubt it will become a movie, but I can dream!)

Characters: [name_u]Evelyn[/name_u], 20 years old, long dirty blonde ringlets, green eyes. [name_f]Mary[/name_f], Evelyn’s mother, 48, [name_m]Long[/name_m] brown hair, [name_u]Green[/name_u] eyes. [name_u]James[/name_u], short blonde buzz cut, 49 years old, Evelyn’s father and Mary’s wife. Evelyn’s childhood friends, [name_f]Hannah[/name_f], [name_m]William[/name_m], [name_f]Olivia[/name_f], [name_f]Belle[/name_f], [name_m]David[/name_m], [name_u]Remi[/name_u], [name_f]Katelyn[/name_f], [name_m]Josh[/name_m].

Blurb: [name_u]Evelyn[/name_u] ran away when she was 18 with just a note on the fridge saying goodbye. She left a small town, [name_u]Murray[/name_u] Harbour, with only about 400 people, so everyone was considered family, and everyone knew she left, and everyone was upset. She left with her boyfriend [name_u]Neil[/name_u], who ended up forcing her to steal, so that they could survive, but she felt that he loved her so she stayed. And one day [name_u]Neil[/name_u] told her that they should actually settle down, and stop stealing, but then, he left her. [name_u]Evelyn[/name_u] was heart broken, and 1 week after he left, she found out she was pregnant. [name_u]Evelyn[/name_u] comes to the conclusion that the only chance she possibly has of making this work is if she goes back to her town. So, she goes back and sees her parents. Her parents are overjoyed to see her, when she tells her that she is pregnant, they aren’t mad at her, and they are happy to help. But [name_u]Evelyn[/name_u] is still worried about how all her friends will react to her coming back, she’s sure they won’t care about her, and if she decides to keep the baby, how will everyone react to a 20 year old mother who left all of them? (Sorry that was a really long and bad description)

Questions: I’m just curious, does this sound better as a movie or a book to you? Does this [name_u]Story[/name_u] interest you?

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Title: Nights in [name_u]Brooklyn[/name_u]

Demographic: Adults mainly. Nothing YA couldn’t handle but more adult topics

Genre: [name_u]Drama[/name_u] with some romance

Medium/Format: Screenplay

Characters: Three sisters in their early to middle 30s- [name_f]Josephine[/name_f], [name_f]Norah[/name_f], and [name_u]Ruby[/name_u], their aunt who raised them [name_f]Adrienne[/name_f], spouses- [name_m]Tim[/name_m] & [name_u]Whitney[/name_u], fiancée [name_m]Rob[/name_m], love interest [name_u]Harper[/name_u], parents- [name_f]Frances[/name_f] & [name_m]Matteo[/name_m] “Matt”, some other family members as well. Mentions of brother, [name_m]Ben[/name_m], who has passed.

Blurb: Now in their 30s the Sicora sisters are moving on with their adult lives. [name_f]Josephine[/name_f] “Jo” and her wife, [name_u]Whitney[/name_u], are in the process of adopting a child, [name_f]Norah[/name_f] is overcoming post-partum depression and a career in the social media spotlight, and [name_u]Ruby[/name_u] is trying to help everyone while making sense of the parents she doesn’t know. After their brother [name_m]Ben[/name_m] dies at age 7 in a drowning accident, their father [name_m]Matt[/name_m] has never been able to forgive himself. [name_f]Frances[/name_f], their mother, falls into deep addiction with alcohol and gambling. One drunk driving incident with the girls, makes way for them to move to NYC to be with their carefree, artist aunt who appears to be the only one caring for the sisters. With her own problems with her other siblings and parents [name_f]Adrienne[/name_f] navigates raising her nieces and essentially gives herself over to raising them and her photography. Now with the girls long moved out [name_f]Adrienne[/name_f] finds herself dating again. The Sicora women are learning how to live with their pasts and their independent futures as they tackle the world together.

Questions: Does that synopsis feel like enough to be interested or do I need to dive deeper or leave things out?

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Hello! Answering some questions…

I love that genre, so probably! One thing I do want to say, is since you have a very adult character, the novel would probably not be considered YA. Usually, YA books have teenage/young adult protags, so that you might want to consider. However, anyone can read whatever they want, and since this is a WIP, it doesn’t really matter. I just thought I’d say that! :blush:
As for your second question, I love that plot twist! Go for it!

Family dramas are always intriguing! Honestly, I see it more as a book, but it’s still a very cool concept nonetheless.

Alright. I love the concept of your story; it sounds so cool! Here’s how I would rephrase/rewrite the synopsis, just as a little feedback! It already sounds great, but I feel like there could be a little tweaks in places.

Summary

After a tragic accident in their youth, the Sicora sisters’ parents have never been the same, wallowing in guilt and grief, drowning their sorrows in alcohol and gambling. After one terribly catastrophic event, the sisters make for New York to stay with their carefree aunt, the only person who seems to care for them.

Now, the Sicora women are learning how to live with their pasts and their independent futures as they tackle the world together. The (eldest, youngest, middle…) daughter, Jo, is adopting a child with her wife.
Norah is struggling with postpartum depression and a career in the social medial spotlight, while Ruby is trying to help her siblings make sense of the parents none of them really know. With her own problems between her sisters and parents, Adrienne navigates raising her nieces and, essentially, gives herself over to raising them and nurturing her photography, maybe even dating again.
As they rediscover who they truly are, the sisters realize that they are not their parents, and that they have the opportunity to change. [Insert a closing sentence here]

Good luck to all three of you!

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